Wednesday, January 20, 2010

Tangled

I finally got a lot of that craziness out of my head, but now I'm sick and still have two sick kids. Goodness... what a week. So for now I will post a poem I've been working on. I'm not exactly happy with it. I know it needs work, but I'm not sure what to change. I guess that makes it a good candidate for a rework post in the future?

I'm here
picking at tangled knots.
My thoughts are a mess
of threads.
The parts I've unraveled
are coiled neatly
on the floor.
What remains
tangles faster
than I can untie.
It seems hopeless.
Maybe I'm better off
just going to sleep.

2 comments:

  1. I always enjoy reading your blogs and wish that I could write poetry with any form of success!

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  2. I wouldn't rework it. Add to it maybe? Seems great to me.

    Hope your kids are better. I just listened to my son cry it out for 25 minutes. He was over tired. Hard to hear but better off in the end.

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